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After a long two day journey, Sita could tell there was something wrong with Rama. Sita, Rama, and Lakshmana had been traveling and fast approaching the border that ended their time in Ayodhya. They were on their way to the Ganges River.
"Rama are you alright?" Sita asked, as she looked towards Rama.
"I'm fine," Rama replied sharply.
It was obvious that something was wrong with Rama, but he was too proud to talk about that. Especially to someone who viewed him as their protector. It was upset to be leaving the place where he was born. It may seem silly, but this place meant everything to him. Having to leave was always hard, but this time it seemed different. Rama did not know if he would ever return. Sometimes he wished he could just stay here forever and not have to worry about anything else.
Sita knew what was wrong with Rama, but just wanted to hear it from his own mouth. She realized that was not going to happen. Instead she reached for his hand and comforted him silently. It was then that Rama realized he was always going to be okay as long as he had Sita. Even if he had to leave the place he was from, he was going to be okay. Sita would always be there for him.
As the group crossed the border, Sita began to pray to Ganga for their save return. The Ganges River was not going to be an easy task. It was the third largest river in the world. It was miles and miles long, and there was no promise of them completing their tasks in a safe manner.
"I will walk first," Lakshamana said with pride. "Then Sita, then Rama."
The three got in their order as they looked at the great beast of water they would be dealing with.
Author's Note: This story of 'Crossing the River' is very similar to my retelling. Lakshamana, Sita, and Rama are leaving Ayodhya to cross the Ganges River. One alteration to this story was to make Rama leaving Ayodhya a bigger deal than it was portrayed in the original. After doing my story planning last week I learned the significance of Ayodhya to Rama and the significance the city gains later in life because of him. Ayodhya is Rama's birth place, but today it is one of the seven pilgrimage sites for Hindus. I wanted to make it a bigger deal that he was leaving and make him seem sad about it. The original makes him observe that he is leaving, but with really no emotions tied to this location. I also researched the Ganges River in my story planning. This is where I learned how large it really is. Obviously the story made it dramatic that they were having to cross this river, but I wanted to make it even more so.
Bibliography: 'Crossing the River' by Sister Nivedita
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| The Ganges River Source: Wikimedia |
After a long two day journey, Sita could tell there was something wrong with Rama. Sita, Rama, and Lakshmana had been traveling and fast approaching the border that ended their time in Ayodhya. They were on their way to the Ganges River.
"Rama are you alright?" Sita asked, as she looked towards Rama.
"I'm fine," Rama replied sharply.
It was obvious that something was wrong with Rama, but he was too proud to talk about that. Especially to someone who viewed him as their protector. It was upset to be leaving the place where he was born. It may seem silly, but this place meant everything to him. Having to leave was always hard, but this time it seemed different. Rama did not know if he would ever return. Sometimes he wished he could just stay here forever and not have to worry about anything else.
Sita knew what was wrong with Rama, but just wanted to hear it from his own mouth. She realized that was not going to happen. Instead she reached for his hand and comforted him silently. It was then that Rama realized he was always going to be okay as long as he had Sita. Even if he had to leave the place he was from, he was going to be okay. Sita would always be there for him.
As the group crossed the border, Sita began to pray to Ganga for their save return. The Ganges River was not going to be an easy task. It was the third largest river in the world. It was miles and miles long, and there was no promise of them completing their tasks in a safe manner.
"I will walk first," Lakshamana said with pride. "Then Sita, then Rama."
The three got in their order as they looked at the great beast of water they would be dealing with.
Author's Note: This story of 'Crossing the River' is very similar to my retelling. Lakshamana, Sita, and Rama are leaving Ayodhya to cross the Ganges River. One alteration to this story was to make Rama leaving Ayodhya a bigger deal than it was portrayed in the original. After doing my story planning last week I learned the significance of Ayodhya to Rama and the significance the city gains later in life because of him. Ayodhya is Rama's birth place, but today it is one of the seven pilgrimage sites for Hindus. I wanted to make it a bigger deal that he was leaving and make him seem sad about it. The original makes him observe that he is leaving, but with really no emotions tied to this location. I also researched the Ganges River in my story planning. This is where I learned how large it really is. Obviously the story made it dramatic that they were having to cross this river, but I wanted to make it even more so.
Bibliography: 'Crossing the River' by Sister Nivedita
Kayleigh, your tale of Rama and Sita is very sweet. It gives the impression that their relationship is very strong and that they will do well together in the future. This perspective may be relatable to a lot of readers, which is always an important aspect of writing. The only thing that I would suggest would be to expand on the last sentence and make it a decently sized paragraph. It ended a little abruptly. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Kayleigh! I loved this story and the way you zoned in on Rama and Sita's relationship and love for each other. I feel like it was very relatable when you were mentioning how Sita could tell there was something wrong with Rama, but he didn't want to share how he really felt. I feel that is the case with a lot of people these days, and I have found it useful to just hug them or be there for them whenever they need! So the fact that you had Sita understand and just silently comfort him, I thought it was sweet :) also just a small spelling fix: "As the group crossed the border, Sita began to pray to Ganga for their save return." - I would change the "save" to "safe" :) easy simple fix! Great job on the story, I can't wait to read more of your work!!!
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